Just Pizza Final Draft

Comments and Suggestions

This post is from Joselyn and John.
The positive comments that were most meaningful to us were from Kaycee and Kelsey and Michaela C. and Ashley T. Kaycee/Kelsey told us that the music worked well in the beginning, and that was helpful because it showed us that we were able to create the mood that we were going for. In addition, Michaela/Ashley told us that the pan of the the last slice was very effective, and that helped us see that certain shots help build and emphasize certain points.

The two best suggestions we got were from Kaycee/Kelsey and Chris/Brad.

Kaycee/Kelsey suggested that we find a way to make the pizza not disappear in the light. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is to use another clip that focuses on the pizza and then cut back to Jacob giving the pizza.

Chris/Brad suggested that we cite our sources. We agree with this suggestion, and our plan to address it is by finishing our credits.

Positive comments

We especially like the pan-over of the pizza and table at the beginning of the video because is helped emphasize the idea of the last peice of pizza.-Michaela C. and Ashely T.

What we liked best was the use of the house as a background and the edits- Brad and Chris

The music was worked well in the beginning when they were watching tv; it created a laid back feeling.-Kelsey and Kaycee

We also like the close up of both guys when they are confused about hearing the voice, and the high angle of them looking around the room-Kelsey and Kaycee

We especially like the close up shot of John on the floor because it showed that Jake won the pizza-Isaiah and Cesar

We especially like the close up shot of john on the floor beacause it helped emphasize that they had just fought. –Michaela and Cole

Suggestions

We would just suggest shortening the fade-out clip after the fight-Michaela C. and Ashely T.

You could add to the resolution by showing some more facial expression, this would help us see how they feel about giving/recieving the pizza.-Chris and Brad

Our stongest suggestion is somehow fixing the disappearing pizza when jacob is holding it at the end.-Kelsey and Kaycee

cite your sources because you can get into trouble for that-chris and brad

John, Jacob, Joselyn, Morgan

Rough Draft: Just Pizza

John and Jacob
1) What value are you trying to represent?
-In our video, our group tried to represent the value of sharing

2) What do you think your group has done well?
-I think our group did well on composing the shots from the "slap" to the "arguement"

3) What do you still need to complete?
-We still need to finish editing sound and music and adding the ending and credits.

4) What are you most in need of feedback about? (We want to know if..., We're wondering if this camera angle worked when...etc.)
-We want to know if our group portrayed sharing well without having to announce the value with a title

5) Identify a challenge your group discovered and faced in creating the film. Focus on a challenge about how to best tell your story. Describe how you dealt with that challenge, including discussions you had, things you tried and decided to leave out, and what you ultimately did to address it.
-We were missing a group memeber when we started filming, there were inadvertant environmental factors such as unneccessary amount of sunlight.
We just left the sun light in the film but during it we tried our best to stay out of the it as much as possible.